Part 1:
Introduction: For my introduction I added a lot more about the authors and their writing. When going back to my writing I realised how little I introduced texts and authors. I doubled my introduction paragraph in size. I also revised and changed my thesis so it made more sense to the paper overall
Evidence and Explanation: In two of my paragraphs I saw that they were quite short and also had comments from peers talking about it as well. I had the evidence but needed more explanation and I say. I added 4-7 sentences of explanation and I say throughout the paragraph but mostly at the end to tie the ideas I had together.
Reorganization: I didn’t move any quotes or evidence however I did move a paragraph. In my last paragraph I talked about rhetorical frame and explained specifically what that meant. However the paragraph before that I mention the rhetorical frame but without the context of the next paragraph it could cause confusion to the reader. I swapped these two paragraphs to fix this issue.
New Paragraphs: From the beginning I had enough paragraphs for my paper. My issue was there wasn’t enough inside the paragraphs that supported my claims. I doubled my intro and conclusion paragraphs and added 4-7 sentence to at least two other paragraphs giving me the length I needed in the paper
Part 2:
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