My essay on Understanding Scientific Discourse was one I worked a lot with when I went back to revise it after peer comments. I noticed first that I made some small changes like the title and the date. As I read my introduction, I noticed in my final draft that my introduction had basically doubled. I added in more details on Christina Haas’ article about Eliza as well as more description for the IMRAD. In my body paragraphs I noticed I added a lot more “I say” in my final draft since the original was lacking. In paragraphs 4 and 5 I added a lot of “I say” at the end to summarize the ideas I discussed. In my final draft I also did a bit of reorganizing. I switched paragraphs 4 and 5 to introduce a topic earlier so it made more sense in the following paragraph. I also fixed my quote introductions and instead of starting my sentences with a quote I introduced them or led into them with something like: Gee say… “…” Lastly I added length to my final conclusion. Like my introduction it also doubled in length and now had information summarizing the ideas I brought up in the essay and wrapped up the texts we were working with. I think that after peer reviewing others essays and getting feedback I was made more aware of the mistakes I didn’t see. This helped me grow because issues that became repetitive in an essay were issues I knew I needed to fix for the final draft and in future essays.
