Part A: Sentence with revision if necessary
Part B: Why is this a subordination or coordination sentence and what/why is this intended to emphasize
Coordination Sentences
1A The results not only talk about the outcomes but also comment on it and make connections, which is Gee’s 6th building task.
1B But connects the 2 ideas.
2A So talk to people the right way in a situation you must understand their Discourse, they way they talk, think, act, and believe.
Revised: To to talk to people the right way in a situation you must understand their Discourse, so the way they talk, think, act, and believe.
2B So was moved to connect both ideas.
3A You talk with respect to a parent and if you were reading a document written by a mother you would read it differently than a document written by a kid who got kicked out of the house for bad behavior.
3B And is used to connect both ideas.
Subordination (complex) sentences
4A Don’t view texts as autonomous because none of the information is actually understood and authors would render it useless.
Revised: Because none of the information is actually understood, don’t view texts as autonomous since authors would render it useless
4B The subordinate clause highlighted in red is added to the main clause highlighted in green. Subordinate clauses cannot stand alone in a sentence whereas main clauses can.
4A Original: So understanding the way you are suppose to speak to someone or interpret someones texts becomes easier and is a lot more understandable when you understand their Discourse.
Revised: One needs to understand the way they are suppose to speak to someone or interpret someones texts because it makes it easier when you understand their Discourse.
4B The main clause is highlighted green and the subordinate clause in red. Once again the green can stand alone where as the red cannot which is what makes this a subordination sentence.
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PT 2
Original:
In order to understand scientific research paper you must first understand its format. Scientific writing follows a format known as the IMRAD format. The IMRAD format has an abstract, introduction and importance, methods, results, and a discussion (IMRAD Cheat Sheet). Of course each of these 5 categories are a lot more in depth and specific in their definitions. The purpose of this format is to keep scientific writing in a neat format. The abstract gives the overall summary to tell the reader what to expect. While the introduction and importance convinces readers the topic is important. The methods are the what was done and the results are what is found from that. The discussion is where the author breaks this all down for the reader and tells them what it means for the rest of the data. Similar to this format is James Paul Gee’s building tasks. Although things do not translate over exactly, Gee’s points made in his building tasks can almost be viewed as the same as some of the IMRAD format categories. The first building task in Gee’s writing is the significance. The significance is the importance things in life. Gee’s 6th building task is connections which is the ability to use language and make connections to one or more things. In the context of an IMRAD format paper you could consider the introduction and importance piece as the significance in building tasks. The introduction and importance is saying what makes the writing significant. And the significance is defined as the writings importance. Similarly, Gee talks about connections which directly connects to the results and discussions in the IMRAD format. The Results not only talk about the outcomes but also comment on it and make connections, which is Gee’s 6th building task. The discussions portion of the IMRAD style paper would also contain connections as to why the results may have been this way and what that means in the future.
Revised
In order to understand scientific research paper you must first understand its format. Scientific writing follows a format known as the IMRAD format. The IMRAD format has an abstract, introduction and importance, methods, results, and a discussion. Of course each of these 5 categories are a lot more in depth and specific in their definitions. The purpose of this format is to keep scientific writing in a neat format. The abstract gives the overall summary to tell the reader what to expect. While the introduction and importance convinces readers the topic is important. The methods are the what was done and the results are what is found from that. The discussion is where the author breaks this all down for the reader and tells them what it means for the rest of the data. Similar to this format is James Paul Gee’s building tasks. Although things do not translate over exactly, Gee’s points made in his building tasks can almost be viewed as the same as some of the IMRAD format categories. The first building task in Gee’s writing is the significance. The significance is the importance things in life. Gee’s 6th building task is connections which is the ability to use language and make connections to one or more things. In the context of an IMRAD format paper you could consider the introduction and importance piece as the significance in Gee’s building tasks. Significance is defined as what makes something important or relevant. The introduction and importance is saying what makes the writing significant. Similarly, Gee talks about connections which directly connects to the results and discussions in the IMRAD format. The Results not only talk about the outcomes but also comment on it and make connections, which is Gee’s 6th building task. The discussions portion of the IMRAD style paper would also contain connections as to why the results may have been this way and what that means in the future.
Cleared up the end of the paragraph, it got unclear and repetitive.
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- Where are you already working pretty well with Gee’s concepts? How, specifically, will you apply that more solid engagement to a specific paragraph that is not yet working so effectively with Gee (or Haas, or another text in play)?
A: I am working with Gee really well in the beginning of my paper in the first paragraph. I did a good job introducing and explaining the texts. In my third paragraph I talk about the IMRAD format and connect that to Gee’s building tasks. I did a really great job showing the similarities between the two.
- Where are you doing a pretty good job bringing in pieces of language to illustrate or support a point you’re making about how science Discourse works? Why is that working well? (Try to say what you’re doing that’s working!)
A: I am working well with this concept is in my second paragraph. I give clear and easy examples to aid the reader in understanding what a discourse is and what that means when talking specifically about science discourse. I also give examples connecting that to literacy and then connecting the literary piece to reading scientifically.
- Turn to a paragraph that is not working so effectively with material from your artifacts. What do you need in that paragraph if it’s to become more effective?
A: In my third to last paragraph I am seriously lacking explanation and I say. The paragraph is filled with they say and evidence but has none of my input. For this paragraph to become more effective I need to add in my own thoughts and ideas. I also need to make sure everything is connecting back to my main point in the paper.
4. Write 2-3 sentences that capture what you believe your analysis tells us about science Discourse. These sentences will help you identify your perspective on how science Discourse works, which will help you revise your introduction and possibly the conclusion!
A: I think my analysis of my Science Discourse tells the reader about the importance of understanding the discourse before reading the text so the reader isn’t just extracting facts but they’re also understanding the authors point and meaning. Science Discourse is a deeper understanding of the meaning behind the words on the paper.
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